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Wednesday, December 12, 2007

PORTFOLIO: Reflective Letter

"I am irritated by my own writing. I am like a violinist whose ear is true, but whose fingers refuse to reproduce precisely the sound he hears within." This quote by Gustave Flaubert is one that I find to be incredibly true when it comes to my own writing. This state of knowing what I want to say, but can’t actually get it to come out is the main problem I have always had when it comes to writing. I find that this is a problem that just about every writer faces sometime throughout their writing career. For me I found that there was no way to actually fix this problem but that I had to change my writing process in order to try and work around this dilemma. Through my writing 101 course and writing my first and second essays I feel like I was finally able to adapt to this flaw and truly improve my writing process and writing abilities.

When I first entered my writing 101 course I found myself having many problems writing at a college level. The first essay assigned was on Bacon’s Rebellion. Since this was my first essay I found myself doing just about everything wrong. One problem I found with my first essay was my ability to write a good thesis. Since the beginning of this quarter the word thesis was a word that I never heard before. I thought I understood how to write one, but after getting my first essay back I found I didn’t. For example at first my thesis was "Econmincs was a huge factor that caused bacon's rebellion". I really didn’t understand what I was doing wrong until I started to ask my classmates how I could improve. Then through the help I received, I attempted writing my thesis’s in a new way. I began to include the factors that are needed in a high level thesis, and now I believe that the thesis’s I write are considered higher quality. When I went back and wrote that thesis again it now reads "Economic problems were the major driving forces behind Bacon's Rebellion, and still shape the world as we know it today". As you can see my thesis writting has greatly improved. The second problem I found with writing this essay was how to incorporate my personal voice. When I first wrote this essay It was mainly just facts after facts with a little bit of what I thought near the bottom. After I received feedback however I started to try and change this in my writing. Through help from my teacher and classmates I started adapting my personal voice to all of my work and I feel that now it is present in all of my work giving it originality.

My creative aspect in writing started to blossom out as the quarter progressed, and we were given our second essay. This essay was a group project on Loyalist verses Patriots. This essay was very unique however; we were able to write it in pretty much any format that we wished. My partner and I decided to do a conversation between a Loyalist and a Patriot. While writing this essay I found that by being able to let out a more creative side I was able to write something that not only was better work but also something that was easier to read. One problem I found while writing this essay however was that I did not like writing assignments in groups. I found that for me having two different voices in a paper is something really hard to do. It was also a lot harder to be responsible for both myself and my partner. I realized however that this type of group work is something that is going to come up more and more in future work, so I started to try and make the best of it. I feel that this first group experience caused me to be ready for the next group writing assignment we had, in which after some time we were able to produce higher quality work.

While writing my final exam I started to realize all of the things I have learned throughout this quarter and began to incorporate them into my essay. I believe that I was able to write a truly wonderful essay using everything that I have learned and when I was done I was very pleased with myself. I started off with a very well written thesis that I was very proud of and I know that it was high level and had all the factors that make a thesis truly good. I also organized all of my thoughts well throughout this essay in a way that was easy to read and understand. One thing that I did have trouble on though was just trying to get all of my ideas out. I was able to write a lot of the key things I had to say about the prompt, but since it was a timed exam I was not able to take all of the time I usually need to think about a topic. By having this portion of my writing process limited by time I found it harder to get all of my points across. Even with this problem I still believe that I was able to make good points and I feel that I did make the essay as a whole a success and was proud of my work. While writing this essay I started to realize all the improvements I have made throughout this quarter, and I found it rewarding using these new writing skills successfully in this essay.

One factor that I found was present in doing all of my essays was that I am a huge procrastinator. For my first two essays I was procrastinating so much that I didn’t even start writing my essays until a couple hours before it was due. This is one of the major factors I found that hindered my writing. Once I recognized this fact however, I started to try my hardest to stop it. Now so close away from the end of the quarter, I have started to look back at all the work I have done. I can now truly see how much I have stopped my procrastinating habits, since the beginning of this quarter. This has been shown through all of my latter essays and my revised ones. I feel that I was finally able to kick this habit and now with getting things done sooner I am able to edit a lot more and have a lot more drafts. This is something that I feel has truly made life easier when it come to my writing and hopefully is shown the quality of my work.

For a lot of people writing come naturally to them. For me however writing is something that I have to keep working on continuously. By continuously working on my flaw of writing what I truly am trying to say, I found that I was able to make my writing better a small step at a time. If I don’t I find that everything I write is terrible and not of good quality at all. Through this writing 101 course however I feel I learned many skills that overall have improved not only the way I write but the way I think about writing as well. I now feel that my overall writing skill has improved and also my ability to write what I truly think is better. Through these revised essays it is very easy to see the improvements I have made with my writing. I still am not a perfect writer though, but hopefully through continuing to try and improve myself I one day will be considered a truly great writer.

PORTFOLIO: Revised Essay#1

Picture a world that is so corrupt, that one group of people control the world economy This group has all of the power and will do anything that it takes to keep themselves happy. In this type of world the majority of people would be poor and unable to live successful lives. This type of government not only existed in the past, but remains present in some countries today. It is my belief, that this is the world’s future unless the human race works to change their ways and becomes less selfish. Economic problems were the major driving forces behind Bacon's Rebellion , and shaped the world as we know it today.

From the beginning of the Jamestown colony its main purposes were to develop as a well functioning colony with a strong economy. From the inception of life in this new land it was seen as a means to get rich quick. There were vast acres of fertile land ripe for farming unlike the environment in England where every piece of land was already owned. Initially the settlers were unsuccessful at farming and many of the early citizens died of starvation. Eventually they discovered a profitable crop know as tobacco. Once found, the colonists began to grow massive amounts, which in turn made the Jamestown economy flourish. Soon there was a huge separation between the rich tobacco plantation owner and the poorer farmers.

During this time of new settlements, many economic problems started to occur. "These problems included declining tobacco prices, weather problems; including hailstorms, floods, dry spells, and hurricanes, growing commercial competition from Maryland and the Carolinas, an increasingly restricted English market, and the rising prices from English manufactured goods caused problems for the Virginians” (http://www.nps.gov/archive/colo/Jthanout/BacRebel.html,) as this source states these problems continued plaguing the colonist’s economy blow after blow. These facts demonstrate how there are so many factors that can cause the economy to fail. I believe that this was a major contributing problem that influenced the start of Bacon’s rebellion. These problems affected the large tobacco farmers dramatically, but poorer farmers like Bacon were the ones who really suffered the most economically. If the economy at that time was prosperous then I believe Bacon’s group would never have had a problem with the order of things. With this huge inequality Bacon and his men were forced to find ways to not only improve their own plight but to improve the whole colonies economy as well.

With the economy diminishing Bacon and his followers thought it was time to act and soon the rebellion began. It started with Bacon’s people trying to find a way to blame someone else for their misfortunes. The unlucky people they chose were the Indians. Instead of them trying to work harder on their own land they started to think that everything would be easier if they could take more land. So Bacon’s people started at first by just spreading over past the land that was theirs and into the Indians land. This caused the Governor at that time to intervene. Soon the colonist were fighting between following the land treaties and trying to just make everyone’s lives more profitable. It ended in Bacon’s people getting defeated. Our history book says “The ruling elite concluded that it was safer for the colonists to fight Indians rather than each other, and the government made little effort to restrict encroachment on Indian lands. (The American Promise page 93). I believe that the book did not go into how significant this decision truly was. It did not talk about how this decision came to be or what the aftermaths of making it would be. My opinion is that this decision was one of the most important ones in shaping the future of the Chesapeake society.

This Decision to break Indian treaties and do what was best for the colonies own needs, caused economy to improve not only in the Chesapeake area but all over east coast. As Joshua Cleveland says “Bacon’s Rebellion was a turning point in Virginia and in colonial history.” (http://www.wm.edu/niahd/journals/index.php?browse=entry&id=4124). As Cleveland states here this whole rebellion had much more effect on the world then just in Jamestown. It actually started to change the way in which colonists would take and use their land. This is because once the Englishmen started to break Indian land treaties they started to have even more land for which they could grow crops. In the end the new land they acquired made the economy only improve dramatically. Soon after the rebellion land started to be farmed more without any borders in the way. This caused Virginia and other east coast colonies to be one of the largest assets to England economy. This is one of those parts of history that people say was not morally right. But they simply need to understand that almost all of the actions of these early colonists were for economic profit and without a good economy the world is nothing. In my opinion I think that our world always has been based around creating this good economy and without one everything just crumbles to dust. So I think that even though the colonists broke their land treaties and killed many Indians, if the economy improved then it was all worth it

This style of do anything for the good of the economy is still present all over the world today. One example is how people in third world countries are getting paid slave wages making goods that the world depends on. While these people are getting treated terribly we must ask ourselves what we would do without these goods. The truth is that right now the way the world runs is based primary on who ever has the most money has the most power. This is the main problem with not only America but the whole entire world. The truth is that economy as it is now is based around making one group of people incredibly rich and the rest very poor. So we must accept that this is how the world works and there is no way it will change anytime soon so I say forget your morals and just do whatever is in your best economic interest. Now that you understand this we can go back and compare today’s world with Bacon’s rebellion. If you do this then you will obviously see that both in the past and still today the world is based off of one simple thing, that thing is economic profit. With out it there is no world that could exist.

Without economy there is no world. This is a statement that I have spent many hours contemplating over and over again. In the end I believe that I came to the conclusion that the world as we know it is doomed. I came to this conclusion by realizing that without money right now there is no way to live a successful life. With this being the way things are more then half of the population of the world is suffering. My hope is that some day the human race will evolve past their greedy ways, and then maybe we will finally have a world that I would be proud to live in. Bacon’s Rebellion was just one of these examples of economy causing people to turn into greedy monsters. Hopefully people will someday be able to learn from these past events and then start to try and change the world to a state of peace.

PORTFOLIO: Revised Essay#2

Character Background:


Patriot88jonnyboy is really a man by the name of John William. He is a merchant from Massachusetts and sells just about any good that people might need. John however is a die hard patriot. He is a visionary of his time and has many ideas that most patriots haven’t even thought of yet. In town he is thought of as a simple man who simply is trying to make a living for himself. However he really is much more. He tries to change the views of all other colonists to try and realize that his ideas are the only ones that really matter.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist is really a woman named Bridget Smith. She was raised as a proper British family and believes that being loyal to the king is the best thing for everyone. She is a single mother of two. Her husband died almost a year ago in a strange incident involving a cow. Bridget was forced to try and fend for her family as best she could. She kept her deceased husband’s vegetable farm going and tries her best to sell as many of the crops as she can. Luckily she has friends like John William around to help her when she needs it.

Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist- Hey there good sir. How is the day treating thee?


Patriot88jonnyboy-Not to shabby. Just out on the streets all day trying to earn money to feed myself.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - I know what you mean. It is hard to try and support ourselves, not to mention our families with all of these problems that the patriots keep causing.


Patriot88jonnyboy -You do know I am a patriot right?


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -Yeah but I just don’t understand how you can go and disobey the rules that our king set down for us. After all he is doing what he thinks is best for all of Britain. When you truly think about it Being loyal to the king seems like the best option for us. Not only will our trade continue but we will still be in good terms with our king.


Patriot88jonnyboy - Yeah I know that. But when it comes down to it he just doesn’t know what it is like over here in the colonies. So what gives him rights to set our laws? We the people of this new land must be able to govern ourselves if we ever want to truly make a prosperous land for us to live.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -I get what you are saying. But you make it sound like you no longer even want to be British anymore. And if we aren’t British anymore then I just don’t know what else there is.


Patriot88jonnyboy -Our sense of identity is not what truly matters. All that matters is what is best for our own people, and that is to have laws that truly will help make our land thrive.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -That may be true. But with all of these taxes going on, not only are we repaying our debt for Britain’s help but as a merchant I myself make a better profit.


Patriot88jonnyboy -Yeah I know that. It makes our lives a lot better but at the same time everyone else keeps getting money taken from them that they never agreed to pay. How can you agree to this treatment of our people day after day? The King just keeps sending us laws and taxes without our consent at all. This is just wrong so how can you tolerate it?


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -What can I say? I am a little greedy but if I wasn’t then my whole family would probably suffer a lot more.


Patriot88jonnyboy -See that is the problem with you loyalists, you are unable to grasp the big picture. We are far away from Great Britain so we must have laws that are different that help us out more in the end.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -STFU!!! I don’t care what you have to say. We are British people and we must act like that and follow what our king says no matter what.


Patriot88jonnyboy - You are such a stupid little person. That is why we patriots act the way we do. We fight the king’s laws and taxes so we can better our country as a whole. We start movements to stop the taxes and have demonstrations to show this. The Boston Tea Party for example was a way to show how we won’t pay ridiculous taxes for our goods anymore.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -All that demonstration did was waste more of our money and cause more problems with our relationship with Britain. You must yourself understand that almost all of our goods are sold to Britain. If we cause them to stop trade with us then all that will happen is our economy will suffer and no one will win in the end. Our only way to keep our colony strong is to keep a good relationship with Britain and follow what we are told to do.


Patriot88jonnyboy -You have this naive way of thinking. I believe that we colonies if we have to, can fend for ourselves. We have the ability to keep ourselves wealthy. If we trade only with other colonies not only will we have more goods here but we will not need to pay British taxes anymore. We can start our own government and start to have laws and taxes that will actually be good for us.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - Yeah I guess. But I don’t see how you can think that. We have always been British and will continue to be British also. I just don’t think anything good will happen if we change our ways. If we aren’t part of Britain then who are we? We would have no identity and that is not something I want.


Patriot88jonnyboy – I know. But we need to form a new identity. We need to try and change.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist – Maybe, but if you patriots would’ve just followed the king’s laws like the stamp act, then we wouldn’t be going through these issues.


Patriot88jonnyboy - We just wanted to have a say in what OUR colonies have to do. Instead of the King setting up all these rules and taxes without our consent, need I remind you!


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - well it doesn’t change how powerful he is. HE IS THE KING…. He can do what he feels. He doesn’t need your consent. If it wasn’t for him the colonies wouldn’t have been formed to begin with.


Patriot88jonnyboy - Ok. But was it really necessary to place taxes on every paper and document??? What a waist of money which isn’t that easy to come by anyway. That is why we patriots don’t want to be under the king’s rule. The king doesn’t even consider us British anymore.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -Who knows exactly? It doesn’t matter whether that is necessary or not.


Patriot88jonnyboy - How can you say that??? You do know that the taxes were charged to your fellow loyalists don’t you??


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - How can you not obey the king? How can you go against all he says? What makes you think you’re so right and he’s so wrong??


Patriot88jonnyboy - First of all, it’s not that we want to disobey the king. We just don’t agree with everything he has done thus far with the colonies. He hasn’t been here; he doesn’t know what we go through, or what our colonies have become. It’s not a matter of right and wrong. WE want what may be better.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - But the king IS BETTER. He is ruler of England and it’s unbelievable to think that anyone would even try to go against his rule. I don’t understand.


Patriot88jonnyboy – And that is the problem with you loyalists. You are unable to grasp the big picture. You need to realize that we are becoming our own land. If we don’t start to try and separate from the kingdom then nothing good will ever happen for us. So I will just leave you be to try and understand this better. We will talk again soon I hope. And maybe you will even try to be more open-minded and understand where I am coming from.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist –Maybe I will. Well goodbye I will talk with you later my friend.

Sources:1) The American Promise Text book

2) http://www.constitution.org/bcp/vir_res1765.htm

3) http://www.si.umich.edu/SPIES/index-people.html

Monday, December 10, 2007

PORTFOLIO: FINAL EXAM

“Why consider history? Simply because I am interested in the past? No, if one means by that… a history of the past in terms of the present. Yes, if one means… the history of the present.” This quote was said by a famous philosopher by the name of Michel Foucault. This quote means that when we think about history we must think about it in terms of learning from past events to try and learn from them and reach a better outcome for the present or the future. This is the reason why I believe that history is important. I see it as a way to create a better world. This is because when ever we are faced with a problem, if we go back in and history and look at past events then we can see what worked, and what didn’t, which will ultimately lead to a better solution to solving that problem. This also applies to problems faced from day to day, where you can go back and look at past mistakes you made and try to learn what the best way to solve them is. I have witnessed this many times throughout my history and writing combined study class and believe that by applying this theory I have indeed bettered myself.

I have used this theory of looking back to better myself countless times throughout this quarter to try and improve my writing. One experience that comes to mind is when we first started to use sources in our essays. I began by simply finding any relevant information and just putting it in my work because that is what I thought was right. Latter however when the grades were given back, it was obvious that I was not doing this correctly. At first I didn’t understand what I was doing wrong but eventually I started to apply the theory of learning from past mistakes and started to realize exactly what I was doing wrong. I started to understand that the way I used to do things in writing was not good enough anymore and that I had to start and learn how to truly find sources that would impact my work greatly. Another way that I have used this theory is by truly evaluating my writing process and trying to see what past habits I would need to change in order to improve my process as a whole. By looking at how I used to write an essay I narrowed in to what one real problem as a writer that I had. This problem was protracting. I would always do my essays at the latest possible time. When I truly realized how much this hindered the overall quality of my essay I started to actually change this habit I had. By looking back and seeing how much of a problem this truly was I finally was able to can it and started to procrastinate less which I believe did cause my grades to improve. When it came to writing I was able to apply this theory many times in order to truly better myself.

When it came to history however I applied this theory in a very different way. I used it to try look at past events and see how they relate to my life today. One event in history that I truly started to realize how it is affecting me today was the ratification of the constitution. By applying this theory of how the past can affect us today I was able to understand that this event truly did shape what today is know as America. I can see that without this we would not be such a united nation and that we would not be any where as powerful as we are unless this event did happen. So by using this theory and looking at this event in history I was able to come to the conclusion that when it comes down to it even in the present that when people are more equal everything is just more successful.

Overall as a student I feel that by using this theory is the only way that you can ever improve yourself in any way. This is because if you can not learn from past experiences then every decision you make will just be instinct, and that first instinct that you have usually is not the best way to solve anything. So by looking back at past events and learning from then it will in the end lead simply to a solution that will most likely benefit everyone. When it comes down to it there are so many different ways to interpret this quote and the questions that Foucault ask, that it can cause people to think different things about history. This is why I always interpret things in what ever way I feel can cause me to try and improve myself. And it is my belief that any other way that that this quote is interpreted ultimately will not make people truly learn from history at all. They will not know how to truly understand how to improve themselves and that will simply lead to people repeating past mistakes over and over again causing more chaos and destruction throughout the world.

Saturday, December 8, 2007

Reflective Letter (newest version) Edit please

"I am irritated by my own writing. I am like a violinist whose ear is true, but whose fingers refuse to reproduce precisely the sound he hears within." This quote by Gustave Flaubert is one that I find to be incredibly true when it comes to my own writing. This state of knowing what I want to say, but can’t actually get it to come out is the main problem I have always had when it comes to writing. Through my writing 101 course and writing my first and second essays I feel like I was finally able to adapt to this flaw and truly improve my writing process and writing abilities.

My first essay was on Bacon’s Rebellion. Since this was my first essay I found myself doing just about everything wrong. One problem I found with my first essay was my ability to write a good thesis. Since the beginning of this quarter the word thesis was a word that I never heard before. I thought I understood how to write one, but after getting my first essay back I found I didn’t. I really didn’t understand what I was doing wrong until I started to ask my classmates how I could improve. Then through the help I received, I attempted writing my thesis’s in a new way. I began to include the factors that are needed in a high level thesis, and now I believe that the thesis’s I write are considered higher quality. The second problem I found with writing this essay was how to incorporate my personal voice. When I first wrote this essay It was mainly just facts after facts with a little bit of what I thought near the bottom. After I received feedback however I started to try and change this in my writing. Through help from my teacher and classmates I started adapting my personal voice to all of my work and I feel that now it is present in all of my work giving it originality.

My second essay was one that was much more creative. This essay was a group project on Loyalist vs. Patriots. This essay was very unique however; we were able to write it in pretty much any format that we wished. My partner and I decided to do a conversation between a Loyalist and a Patriot. While writing this essay I found that by being able to let out a more creative side I was able to write something that not only was better work but also something that was easier to read. One problem I found while writing this essay however was that I did not like writing assignments in groups. I found that for me having two different voices in a paper is something really hard to do. It was also a lot harder to be responsible for both myself and my partner. I realized however that this type of group work is something that is going to come up more and more in future work, so I started to try and make the best of it. I feel that this first group experience caused me to be ready for the next group writing assignment we had, in which after some time we were able to produce higher quality work.

One factor that I found was present in doing all of my essays was that I am a huge procrastinator. For my first two essays I was procrastinating so much that I didn’t even start writing my essays until a couple hours before it was due. This is one of the major factors I found that hindered my writing. Once I recognized this fact however, I started to try my hardest to stop it. Now so close away from the end of the quarter, I have started to look back at all the work I have done. I can now truly see how much I have stopped my procrastinating habits, since the beginning of this quarter. This has been shown through all of my latter essays and my revised ones. I feel that I was finally able to kick this habit and now with getting things done sooner I am able to edit a lot more and have a lot more drafts. This is something that I feel has truly made life easier when it come to my writing and hopefully is shown the quality of my work.

For a lot of people writing come naturally to them. For me however writing is something that I have to keep working on continuously. If I don’t I find that everything I write is terrible and not worth anything. Through this writing 101 course however I feel I learned many skills that overall have improved not only the way I write but the way I think about writing as well. I now feel that my overall writing skill has improved and also my ability to write what I truly think is better. Through these revised essays it is very easy to see the improvements I have made with my writing. I still am not a perfect writer though, but hopefully though continuing to try and improve myself I one day will be considered a truly good writer.

Thursday, November 29, 2007

Reflection on Essay #3

#1 For this essay our group interaction was ok I guess but could have been a lot better. To begin with we really didn't actually start writing the actual essay until the Monday before it was actually due. This was mainly because over thanksgiving weekend we never contacted each other with what we wanted to have done. Then when Monday rolled out we did assign each person to do a certain task and that caused some problems as well with what was done when it should have been. Overall I think that our group interacted fine just each individual person had some sort of issue somewhere along the line that did cause problems.

#2 I don't think my group used the contract one single time though out this essay. In fact I completely forgot that it was there until this day. However now that I look back at it I can use it in my process or grading my other group members. I think that the contracts as a whole was a good way to try and keep our group organized it is just that we never really used it which really is just saying bad for my own group but whatever.

#3 Our wiki did help out our essay a lot in the long run. That is mainly though because Angi found tons of articles and sites that when we looked back at the wiki we were able to find information that in the end only made the essay better and stuff. I think that using the 4 person wiki group however was a bad thing because in a 4 person group like that there is always going to be those people that don't contribute as much cause more of the work load to fall on someone else.

#4 I think this essay as a whole did cause me to progress more. One thing that I know I improved in was that for the first time I think that I was actually able to find quotes that truly did work to improve the end result of my essay. I also feel that i was able to better follow the rubric for this essay but now that I look at it again I see that I did leave out a few things but ehhh whatever. Overall I feel That with each essay I do I do end up improving somewhat with each one, and hopefully that will show up in the final grade as well.

Wednesday, November 28, 2007

Essay #3

Carolyn Shaw, Ben Zuidema, Britta Wischer, Angela Kim


New Jersey as a whole was a state that was rich with culture and forward thinking individuals. As they watched history progress, the people of New Jersey started to realize that there were many problems with the way that their government was beginning to be run. The New Jersey people began to come to the realization that if all of the states did not join together and form a government that would support all states that the end result might turn out to be chaos and mayhem, not to mention that America had just won its way out from under Britain's wing, and they did not want to be reabsorbed! The people of New Jersey decided to start this process of positive change by being one of the first states to ratify of the constitution. They knew that this move was somewhat of a risky one, but the majority also believed that such a calculated risk was worth the possibility of failure. In short, they were saying that though they understood where the Anti-Federalists stood, they could not doubt the need of the people for a strong centralized government.

During 1787 and 1788 the main topic was that of the possible ratification of the Constitution. Many of the states had mixed reactions which slowed down the process even more, but New Jersey was one of the states whose people almost completely supported it. The main reason for their support, as stated above, was their pure belief in the need of the people for a strong government. They knew that if they did not have a strong national government, anarchy or political disorder would triumph. These people were pretty certain that only a strong national government could ever truly protect the new nation. They believed that it would solve not only internal problems but also would keep the nation safe from their enemies, protecting their land from intruders with a clear set of rules that all were expected to follow.

When the whole issue of ratifying the constitution came up there were many different beliefs that both sides of the table held, and many of those same beliefs were dear to the other side of the argument as well. Federalists themselves thought that this was the only way that they would ever truly prosper as a country. It was there belief that the only way they could ever start a nation that was truly wonderful and better in every way then Britain was to make a new government. But for this new nation to succeed they needed to start a new form of government that while it still had many of the British government stuff in it, it as itself was different enough that it would cause true order to start. It was their belief that if they simply changed the way power was distributed that it would cause order in every shape and form. They thought that they would be able to have a better society by having people decide more what is best for them then having one figure head in charge trying to do what only he himself thought was best. This quote best shows what the federalists were thinking. “Enlarge the public views by passing them through the medium of a chosen body of citizens, whose wisdom may best discern the true interest of their country, and whose patriotism and love of justice will be least likely to sacrifice it to temporary or partial considerations…” (James Madison, The Federalist, No. 10.) James Madison here is just saying exactly what most New Jersey Federalists were thinking. That a body of citizens in almost all causes will be able to make better decisions then a king could. The Anti-Federalists however believed this as well but they were more afraid that they would just make the mistakes of the British government system all over again. The Anti-Federalist’s were more thinking along the path that power corrupts. A famous quote by William Pitt the Younger says it best. "Unlimited power is apt to corrupt the minds of those who possess it" (http://www.number10.gov.uk/output/Page161.asp). This quote is one that the Anti-Federalists probably thought about a lot. It simply shows how they thought that any form of central government always results in some one getting corrupt or greedy and then goes and starts to do what is best for him instead of what is best for the general public. This was one of the most important beliefs Anti-Federalists had that made them think the way they did. They were in no way wanting to start a new government that would in the end give the citizens themselves no power. So with these ideas in their heads they would do what ever they could to try and keep away from a central government and try to only care about their own individual sates. Many Anti-Federalists’ feared that “A consolidation of this extensive continent under on government [under the Constitution of 1787] cannot succeed, without a sacrifice of your liberties.” – Brutus. Brutus was a pseudonym for a man or group of men who put out the Anti-Federalist version of the The Federalist Papers, expounding upon the reasoning behind their beliefs. Many an Anti-Federalist deeply agreed with what Brutus said, using quotes from his literature in their arguments against the Federalists.

Many Anti-Federalists in America thought that the ratification of the constitution was a great nuisance. After years of having to deal with the British Government, the colonist’s minds were uneasy with the thought of a centralized power, one that could possibly bring the reign of the Britons back to America. And although they knew that they needed a strong form of government, the idea of people holding too much power disturbed them deeply. Early federalist such as Alexander Hamilton, James Madison, and John Jay spent much of their time trying to convince that if there was not a strong national government, than only anarchy or political disorder would be possible. The main problem that Anti-Federalists have is that they fear that with a central government in place it will only lead to a new kind of Britain that is full of tyranny and people not having their voice heard. These beliefs however do not warrant enough of a reason to not ratify the constitution. This is because America as it was during this time had no government at all to truly keep order. They needed some kind of document to do this for the people. This was the constitution, it would allow the American people to finally start off as being an independent country that can truly fend for it’s self. So the reason why Anti-Federalists were viewed as wrong was pretty much because America needed to start off with some kind of Structure, this was the constitution, and while it probably would have many problems with it at first over time as a country there would always be the ability to change it as long as it would cause the county as a whole to benefit. The Constitution was finally finished on September 12, 1787 and made public. An issue brought up by the Anti-Federalists was that of the economics of the South based mostly off of slave labor. This problem came to be the fact that the Southern states thought that when they did ratify the constitution that the Northern states would start to try and stop using as much slave labor. The south thought that this would only cause their economy to fall and was a huge reason why they decided to be more Anti-Federalists. This however was not really a problem for the federalists. They still would not do anything to make their economy suffer. So of course slave labor would be there because no one wanted to see their country start to fail. So this is just another fear that Anti-Federalists had with ratifying the constitution. Pretty much Anti-Federalists believe the way they do off of fears that in reality never would really come true.

When it comes down to it the issue of anti-federalist verses federalists was an issue that lasted a while. New Jersey was one of those states however that very quickly decided to be federalists and in the end their decision was one that only made their state better. They went into ratifying the constitution without truly knowing what the end result would entail. They just said we want change with the way we are currently being run so they decided the constitution would only help them in the long run. This decision did however very soon start to pay off and it caused the federalists of New Jersey to finally see a more successful way of living within their new nation.

Personal responses:

Ben: In my own opinion I think that being federalists was the only real thing that would make the American public ever truly prosper. It was the only possible option that would ever cause the chaos to stop and bring order to the people. The truth is that men in their natural state are complete animals. If they are left to do what they please then they will simply do what is best for them without thinking about what might happen to the rest of the world. This is why I believe that they need some form of government and laws to keep them in check. And that is all that the Constitution was doing. It was making it so that states no longer just did what was best for themselves, but to instead help create a country that makes sure every citizen is in some way contributing to form a more peaceful and happy society for all to live in. To put it simply this type of central government was exactly what the people of America needed to finally start and try to create a stable and self functioning country. So federalists were doing what they could to change the country for the better and the Anti-Federalists were afraid of this change and not ready to truly see the big picture.

Carolyn: In our society there is no real "Federalist" or "Anti-Federalist", at least not at the level of the distinction that there was in the late 1700's. In spite of this lack of real-world application, I think I would have been an Anti-Federalist. In my reality, the Constitution is a mark of pride, something that has kept our country going for over 200 years. But, were I a person of that time, I'm sure I would have reacted differently. I am a great advocate of free will and every person's right to choose as I have always been, and to me that is what the Anti-Federalists signified. At the beginning I took my typical Protagonist vs. Antagonist stance, choosing the Federalists as my Protagonist characters and the Anti-Federalists as my Antagonists, but over time and with much research my views began to change. The Federalists were a group that actively yearned for structure, for someone to tell them what to do and when to do it, while the Anti-Federalists wanted to be able to control themselves and their lands.



Angi: Overall I would side with the Federalists, but there is just one thing that I have to agree with the Anti-federalist's. I believe that a Bill of Rights is needed with the Constitution because although eight states already had such bills in their state constitutions, what about the other states? Though, I agree and fully support the Constitution. Each and every state are individually different, but that does not mean that each state is capable of growing and prospering on their own, to the way they want, without any means of help. In order for the states to grow, I believe that the states require help and support from the other fellow states. The Constitution binds all these states, and the majority have agreed and signed to it. "The Federalists believed in a strong and effective government that would ensure commercial growth and international prestige; the Anti-federalist's saw such goals threatening liberty and preferred local control." (Source of Quote) Although I see both arguments from both groups, I still agree with the federalists because leaving all the "dirty work" with one strong government, would be more reasonable to me, than having smaller groups trying to solve certain issues with their disagreements. I believe that with smaller governing groups, comes more responsibility, more time is needed for meeting with other groups, and it would be more complicating to come to an official agreement.

Britta: In my experience with writing this essay I think I would have sided more with the Federalists. I think this because while writing this essay I learned a lot about how much trouble existed within the colonies. By having all states being part of one central government it would only promote a better environment for the American people. Having the constitution in place only makes life better for the Americans. It made it so people could live their lives as they please within reason. And in the end as we can clearly see today, it did work and our country is better because of it.

Tuesday, November 27, 2007

essay #3

I. Federalists In General
A. Federalists (Supporters of the Constitution)
i. Early Federalists, mainly Alexander Hamilton, James Madison, and John Fay, had to convince the people in the states that the new federalism of the Constitution was better than the old confederacy.
ii. While they deeply believed that the United States needed a strong central government to survive, they also knew that many people feared the centralization of power.
iii. While they deeply believed that the United States needed a strong central government to survive, they also knew that many people feared the centralization of power.
iv. The colonial experience with the power of British government was still fresh in people’s minds.
v. The Federalists argued that without a strong national government anarchy, or political disorder would triumph.
vi. They claimed that only a strong national government could protect the new nation from enemies abroad and solve the country’s internal problem. They also claimed that a Bill of Rights was not needed since 8 states already had such bills in their state constitutions.
vii. To gain the necessary support, however, the Federalists promised to add a Bill of Rights to the Constitution as the first order of business under a new government.

B. Quotes for Federalists, by Federalists:
i. “The proposed Constitution, so far from implying an abolition of the State governments, make them constituent parts of the national sovereignty, by allowing them a direct representation in the Senate, and leaves in their possession certain exclusive and very important portions of sovereign power. This fully corresponds…with the idea of a federal government.” – Alexander Hamilton, the Federalist, No. 9, 1787.
ii. “Two great points of difference between a democracy and a republic are: first, the delegation of the government, in the latter, to a small number of citizens elected by the rest; secondly, the greater number of citizens, and greater sphere of country, over which the latter may be extended. The effect of the first difference is…to refine and enlarge the public views by passing them through the medium of a chosen body of citizens, whose wisdom may best discern the true interest of their country, and whose patriotism and love of justice will be least likely to sacrifice it to temporary or partial considerations…” – James Madison, The Federalist, No. 10.
C. Anti-Federalists (Opponents of the Constitution)
i. The Anti-Federalists criticized the Constitution for having been drafted in secrecy.
ii. They claimed the document was extralegal, not sanctioned by law, since the Convention had been authorized only to revise the old Articles. They further argued that the Constitution took important powers from the states.
iii. The Anti-Federalists’ strongest argument, however, was that the Constitution lacked a Bill of Rights.
iv. They warned that without a Bill of Rights, a strong national government might take away the human rights won in the Revolution.
v. They demanded that the new Constitution clearly guarantee the people’s freedoms.
D. Quotes for Anti-Federalists, by Anti-Federalists:
i. “A consolidation of this extensive continent under on government [under the Constitution of 1787] cannot succeed, without a sacrifice of your liberties.” – Brutus
ii. “In every free government, the people must give their assent to the laws by which they are governed. This is the true criterion between a free government and an arbitrary one. The former are ruled by the will of the whole [the people], expressed in any manner they may agree upon; the latter by the will of one, or a few. If the people are to giver their assent to the laws, by persons chosen and appointed by them, the manner of the choice and the number chosen must be such, as to possess, be disposed, and consequently qualified to declare the sentiments of the people; for if they do not know, or are not disposed to speak the sentiments of the people, the people do not govern, but the sovereignty is in a few. Now, in a large extended country, it is impossible to have a representation, possessing the sentiments, and of integrity, to declare the minds of the people…” – Brutus, 1787.
iii. “In…a good constitution…the power is committed to [representatives with] the same feelings…and…the same objects as the people [have] … who transfer to them their authority. There is no possible way to effect this but by an equal, full and fair representation…For without this it cannot be a free government; let the administration of it be good or ill, it still will be a government, not according to the will of the people, but according to the will of a few… A farther objection against the feebleness of the representation [in a Constitution of 1787] is that it will not possess the confidence of the people…If then this government [Constitution of 1787] should not derive support from the good will of the people, it must be executed by force, or not executed at all; either case would lead to the total destruction of liberty.” – Brutus, 1787.
iv. “The necessity of a Bill of Rights appears to me to be greater in this government than ever it was in any government before…All rights not expressly and unequivocally reserved to the people are impliedly and incidentally relinquished to rulers…If you intend to reserve your unalienable rights, you must have the most express stipulation; for…If the people do not think it necessary to reserve them, they will supposed to be given up.” – Patrick Henry, 1787.
v. “I am sure they were fully impressed with the necessity of forming a great consolidated government instead of a confederation…and the danger of such a government is, to my mind, very striking…Who authorized them to speak the language of “We, the people,” instead of “We the states”?...If the states be not the agents of this compact, it must be one great, consolidated, national government of the people of all the states…If consolidation proves to be as mischievous to this country as it has been to other countries, what will the poor inhabitants of this country do? This government will…destroy the state governments and swallow the liberties of the people, without giving previous notice…” – Patrick Henry, 1787.

II. The Constitution
i. The Delegates –
A. William Paterson of New Jersey
B. Franklin Dayton, the oldest member; Jonathan Dayton, the 27-year old youngest – delegates from New Jersey.
C. The average age of delegates = 42.
D. Most of the delegates had studied law, had served in colonial or state legislatures, or had been in the Congress.
E. Well versed in philosophical theories of government advanced by such philosophers as James Harrington, John Locke, and Montesquieu, profiting from experience gained in state politics, the delegates composed an exceptional body, one that left a remarkably learned record of debate.
ii. The New Jersey Plan –
A. This nationalist position revolted many delegates who cringed at the vision of a central government swallowing state sovereignty.
B. In June, 13 delegates from smaller states rallied around proposals offered by New Jersey, delegate William Paterson. Railing against efforts to throw the states into “hotchpot,” Paterson proposed a “union of the States merely federal.”
C. The “New Jersey resolutions” called only for a revision of the articles to enable the Congress more easily to raise revenues and regulate commerce. It also provided that acts of Congress and ratified treaties be “the supreme law of the States.”
D. For 3 days the convention debated Paterson’s plan, finally voting for rejection. With the defeat of the New Jersey resolutions, the convention was moving toward creation of a new government, much to the dismay of many small-state delegates.
E. The nationalists, led by Madison, appeared to have the proceedings in their grip. In addition, they were able to persuade the members that any new constitution should be ratified through conventions of the people and not by the Congress and the state legislatures- -another tactical coup.
F. Madison and his allies believed that the constitution they had in mind would likely be scuttled in the legislatures, where many state political leaders stood to lose power. The nationalists wanted to bring the issue before “the people,” where ratification was more likely.
iii. History of the Constitution—
A. The states were very different from each other; however, they realized that in order to grow and prosper, they needed the other states. So, delegates from each state got together and a plan for unity was initially submitted to the 2nd Continental Congress on July 12, 1776. After much debate, on November 15, 1777, the states finally established a “firm league of friendship”.
iv. The Debate Over the Constitution –
A. The Constitution that emerged from Philadelphia in mid-September 1787 by its own terms required the ratification of nine states before it could go into operation.
B. Earlier a federal government meant a government of independent entities, such as that established under the Articles. Now the supporters of the Constitution redefined the term by applying it to the government developed at Philadelphia.
C. The opponents of the Constitution were forced on the defensive both in regard to the appellation, Antifederalist, and in regard to the fact that they had no ready alternative to suggest.
D. Federalists countered that the new government was one of delegated powers with no authority to invade individual rights and that any listing of rights would be incomplete. Their adversaries responded that a central government endowed with the authority to pass “necessary and proper” legislation could indeed infringe on individual rights.
E. Antifederalists recognized that they had found a popular issue and the Federalists had to give ground in a number of states by suggesting that they state append amendment proposals to its ratification. These suggestions were considered in the First Congress and a bill of rights was added to the Constitution in 1791, when the requisite number of states had ratified the first 10 amendments that comprise the Bill.
F. The Federalists believed in a strong and effective government that would ensure commercial growth and international prestige; the Antifederalists saw such goals threatening liberty and preferred local control.
G. The Antifederalists saw a strong national government as a threat to the liberties of Americans, believing its distance from the people and its extended territory only increased the threat.
H. The debate over the Constitution lasted less than a year, and the Antifederalists accepted the fact that its popular ratification had legitimated the document. They hoped though, that they could weaken some of the granted powers by suggested amendments.

III. Anti-Federalists / Why New Jersey are Federalists
i. The anti-Federalists attacked wildly on several fronts: the lack of a bill of rights, discrimination against southern states in navigation legislation, direct taxation, the loss of state sovereignty.
ii. Quote à Federalists = Good
A. “The smaller the society the fewer probably will be the distinct parties and interests composing it; the fewer the distinct parties and interests, the more frequently will a majority be found of the same party and the more easily will they concert and execute their plans of oppression.” Extend the size of the republic, Madison argued, the country would be less vulnerable to separate factions within it.
IV. Ratification
i. By January 9, 1788, five states of the nine necessary for ratification had approved the Constitution—Delaware, Pennsylvania, New Jersey, Georgia, and Connecticut.
ii. The Constitution was finally finished on September 12, 1787 and made public.
iii. The Constitution was finally ratified and became legal on June 21, 1788.
iv. Order of Ratification:
A. Delaware – December 7, 1787
B. Pennsylvania – December 12, 1787
C. New Jersey – December 18, 1787
D. Georgia – January 2, 1788
E. Connecticut – January 9, 1788
F. Massachusetts – February 6, 1788
G. Maryland – April 28, 1788
H. South Carolina – May 23, 1788
I. New Hampshire – June 21, 1788 (With this states signing, the Constitution became legal)
J. Virginia – June 25, 1788
K. New York – July 26, 1788
L. North Carolina – November 21, 1788 (Initially voted against ratification)
M. Rhode Island – May 29, 1790 (Did not even hold a constitutional convention)
v. Bill Of Rights:
A. Because there was so much interest and debate regarding individual freedoms, a Bill of Rights became law on December 15, 1791.
B. Twelve amendments were proposed but only 10 were passed.
C. The Bill of Rights consisted of the Constitution’s first 10 amendments and included freedom of speech, religion, the press, peaceful assembly, and rights to jury trials.

V. Why we disagree with anti-federalist.
i. The main problem that anti-federalists have is that they fear that with a central government in place it will only lead to a new kind of Britain that is full of tyranny and people not having their voice heard. These beliefs however do not warrant enough of a reason to not ratify the constitution. This is because America as it was during this time had no government at all to truly keep order. They needed some kind of document to do this for the people. This was the constitution, it would allow the American people to finally start off as being an independent country that can truly fend for it’s self. So the reason why anti-federalists were viewed as wrong was pretty much because America needed to start off with some kind of Structure, this was the constitution, and while it probably would have many problems with it at first over time as a country there would always be the ability to change it as long as it would cause the county as a whole to benefit. The Constitution was finally finished on September 12, 1787 and made public.
B.
i. Another issue brought up by the anti-federalists was that of the economics of the south based mostly off of slave labor. This problem came to be the fact that the southern states thought that when they did ratify the constitution that the northern states would start to try and stop using as much slave labor. The south thought that this would only cause their economy to fall and was a huge reason why they decided to be more anti-federalists. This however was not really a problem for the federalists. They still would not do anything to make their economy suffer. So of course salve labor would be there because no one wanted to see their country start to fail. So this is just another fear that anti-federalists had with ratifying the constitution. Pretty much anti-federalists believe the way they do off of fears that in reality never would really come true.

Tuesday, November 13, 2007

Reflection on essay #2

1) How did I progress from my first essay to my second?
Overall I think since this second essay was in such a different style then the first that I can't really evaluate whether I progressed or not. I think that the way I wrote the thesis however did improve somewhat. And also I think I was able to finally find 3 reliable sources that did help my essay out a lot in the long run. Overall I think that I was able to improve my creative process though this assignment. I feel like I deserve at least a Pass. Instead of that NP/LP I seem to get in every other assignment I do for Craig. I would say I deserve this grade because I feel like I did fulfill what was asked of me for this assignment. And also feel like I was able to pull out most of the more controversial topics when it came to this topic.

2) How did my writing process mesh with my partner?
I feel like over all me and Isis made a pretty good group. She was very easy to work with and overall I enjoyed having her as my partner. I did find that both of us however were procrastinators. This didn't really help at all but in the end we were able to finally get our stuff done. Isis helped a lot when it came to researching and was able to get her part of the conversation done when it needed to be. I would give Isis a pass for this assignment as well cause we both did equal work when it came to this assignment.

3) What made our group collaboration work?
I think that is was just Isis's personality that made our group successful. Her personality and mine work together so well that both of us were able to do our work without ever really having any disagreements. Isis also is more creative then I am so a lot of the creativity in the end project came more from her, where the more factual things from me. Overall I feel like working with Isis has made me improve more when it comes to being more creative. Hopefully this will show up more in my later work. As a whole I believe that our project should get a passing grade because I feel like we were able to do all that was asked of us for this project. We also picked a topic that I believe was more creative and original then others. And hopefully also included information that people will find both relevant and interesting.

Monday, November 12, 2007

Loylism vs. Patriotism Isis and Ben (edited version)

Character Background:


Patriot88jonnyboy is really a man by the name of John William. He is a merchant from Massachusetts and sells just about any good that people might need. John however is a die hard patriot. He is a visionary of his time and has many ideas that most patriots haven’t even thought of yet. In town he is thought of as a simple man who simply is trying to make a living for himself. However he really is much more. He tries to change the views of all other colonists to try and realize that his ideas are the only ones that really matter.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist is really a woman named Bridget Smith. She was raised as a proper British woman and believes that being loyal to the king is the best thing for everyone. She is a single mother of two. Her husband died almost a year ago in a strange incident involving a cow. Bridget was forced to try and fend for her family as best she could. She kept her deceased husband’s vegetable farm going and tries her best to sell as many of the crops as she can. Luckily she has friends like John William around to help her when she needs it.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist- Hey there good sir. How is the day treating thee?


Patriot88jonnyboy-Not to shabby. Just out on the streets all day trying to earn money to feed myself.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - I know what you mean. It is hard to try and support ourselves, not to mention our families with all of these problems that the patriots keep causing.


Patriot88jonnyboy -You do know I am a patriot right?


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -Yeah but I just don’t understand how you can go and disobey the rules that our king set down for us. After all he is doing what he thinks is best for all of Britain. When you truly think about it Being loyal to the king seems like the best option for us. Not only will our trade continue but we will still be in good terms with our king.


Patriot88jonnyboy - Yeah I know that. But when it comes down to it he just doesn’t know what it is like over here in the colonies. So what gives him rights to set our laws? We the people of this new land must be able to govern ourselves if we ever want to truly make a prosperous land for us to live.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -I get what you are saying. But you make it sound like you no longer even want to be British anymore. And if we aren’t British anymore then I just don’t know what else there is.


Patriot88jonnyboy -Our sense of identity is not what truly matters. All that matters is what is best for our own people, and that is to have laws that truly will help make our land thrive.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -That may be true. But with all of these taxes going on, not only are we repaying our debt for Britain’s help but as a merchant I myself make a better profit.


Patriot88jonnyboy -Yeah I know that. It makes our lives a lot better but at the same time everyone else keeps getting money taken from them that they never agreed to pay. How can you agree to this treatment of our people day after day? The King just keeps sending us laws and taxes without our consent at all. This is just wrong so how can you tolerate it?


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -What can I say? I am a little greedy but if I wasn’t then my whole family would probably suffer a lot more.


Patriot88jonnyboy -See that is the problem with you loyalists, you are unable to grasp the big picture. We are far away from Great Britain so we must have laws that are different that help us out more in the end.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -STFU!!! I don’t care what you have to say. We are British people and we must act like that and follow what our king says no matter what.


Patriot88jonnyboy - You are such a stupid little person. That is why we patriots act the way we do. We fight the king’s laws and taxes so we can better our country as a whole. We start movements to stop the taxes and have demonstrations to show this. The Boston Tea Party for example was a way to show how we won’t pay ridiculous taxes for our goods anymore.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -All that demonstration did was waste more of our money and cause more problems with our relationship with Britain. You must yourself understand that almost all of our goods are sold to Britain. If we cause them to stop trade with us then all that will happen is our economy will suffer and no one will win in the end. Our only way to keep our colony strong is to keep a good relationship with Britain and follow what we are told to do.


Patriot88jonnyboy -You have this naive way of thinking. I believe that we colonies if we have to, can fend for ourselves. We have the ability to keep ourselves wealthy. If we trade only with other colonies not only will we have more goods here but we will not need to pay British taxes anymore. We can start our own government and start to have laws and taxes that will actually be good for us.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - Yeah I guess. But I don’t see how you can think that. We have always been British and will continue to be British also. I just don’t think anything good will happen if we change our ways. If we aren’t part of Britain then who are we? We would have no identity and that is not something I want.


Patriot88jonnyboy – I know. But we need to form a new identity. We need to try and change.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist – Maybe, but if you patriots would’ve just followed the king’s laws like the stamp act, then we wouldn’t be going through these issues.


Patriot88jonnyboy - We just wanted to have a say in what OUR colonies have to do. Instead of the King setting up all these rules and taxes without our consent, need I remind you!


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - well it doesn’t change how powerful he is. HE IS THE KING…. He can do what he feels. He doesn’t need your consent. If it wasn’t for him the colonies wouldn’t have been formed to begin with.


Patriot88jonnyboy - Ok. But was it really necessary to place taxes on every paper and document??? What a waist of money which isn’t that easy to come by anyway. That is why we patriots don’t want to be under the king’s rule. The king doesn’t even consider us British anymore.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist -Who knows exactly? It doesn’t matter whether that is necessary or not.


Patriot88jonnyboy - How can you say that??? You do know that the taxes were charged to your fellow loyalists don’t you??


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - How can you not obey the king? How can you go against all he says? What makes you think you’re so right and he’s so wrong??


Patriot88jonnyboy - First of all, it’s not that we want to disobey the king. We just don’t agree with everything he has done thus far with the colonies. He hasn’t been here; he doesn’t know what we go through, or what our colonies have become. It’s not a matter of right and wrong. WE want what may be better.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist - But the king IS BETTER. He is ruler of England and it’s unbelievable to think that anyone would even try to go against his rule. I don’t understand.


Patriot88jonnyboy – And that is the problem with you loyalists. You are unable to grasp the big picture. You need to realize that we are becoming our own land. If we don’t start to try and separate from the kingdom then nothing good will ever happen for us. So I will just leave you be to try and understand this better. We will talk again soon I hope. And maybe you will even try to be more open-minded and understand where I am coming from.


Hey_itz_BS_the_loyalist –Maybe I will. Well goodbye I will talk with you later my friend.


Sources:
1) The American Promise Text book
2) http://www.constitution.org/bcp/vir_res1765.htm
3) http://www.si.umich.edu/SPIES/index-people.html

Friday, October 26, 2007

Pre-Mid Term

The human race is at a consist struggle of trying to make their lives as best as possible. This means that every single person born on this earth places their own lives and needs over everyone else. Hobbes is one philosopher who argues to this very point. He say that this is the nature of men and no matter what else is being done to the world our actions always are based off of our own self worth.

This quote from Thomas Hobbes talks about two main things. First it talks about how most actions that men take out weather they are positive actions or negative actions, men have the liberty to do those actions. The second things Hobbes discusses is that all actions that men take are based off of the necessity of something. Hobbes is saying that every action men take no matter what it is that action somehow is based off of some need of that individual. So this means that men are born with the liberty to do whatever is best for their own needs.

The statement that all of men's actions are based off of some sort of necessity is something that I strongly believe in. I think that every action we take as humans we take as a way to somehow fulfill this need. Whether it is a kind of physical need, like to stay healthy or a mental need to do what makes you happy. This then in turn means that people's needs will collide. To me this struggle of needs verses needs is the reason why all conflicts ever start. This is shown through Native Americans fighting for their own need, and the colonists need for more land and more money. In the end however both sides can be justified as being right in their actions because like Hobbes also says all men have their own Liberty.

This issue of liberty is also a major factor in all issues of mankind. Hobbes himself argues that all men have liberties that they are born with and no matter what laws are in place people still will act on their liberties as men. To me this statement means that the world will always resort back to some sort of chaos. By going back to what Hobbes says about all men are born with liberty and those liberties are to act on their own needs chaos is the only possible thing that could happen. This is because even when men make some sort of government like a Common-wealth they will only follow those laws as long as they fulfill their current needs. The second those laws are no longer helping them out they will disobey them and once again act for themselves. This is why in the end all governments will fail and also why the world will always be plunged back into the state of chaos.

As grim as this situation sounds according to Hobbes this is the end result of everything. I myself agree with Hobbes on this point a little but also hope that it is also somewhat false. I simply hope that man-kind will someday learn from there mistake and in the end hopefully will evolve into a less selfish race.

This sucked. It is almost impossible for me to organize my thoughts in only 1 hour without me going on random tangents that only make sence to me. But whatever.

Tuesday, October 23, 2007

Reflection Post

How do you think I did?
Well before I got my grade I thought that I did a good job on my essay. I spent a lot of time thinking about and writing the essay starting from my outline to the final result. I probally could have spent even more time though, because there were a few days when I did slack off. When I got my grade of a NP/LP however I was kinda shocked. I think it was because things like organizing my thoughts and not going off on tangents are some of my weakest things when it comes to writing and they were major things I was being graded on.

What have I learned about my writing process?
I don't think I really learned anything about my writing process. I still pretty much do it the same way as I always have which aparently is not good enough anymore. So now I somehow need to find a way to improve it which I am not sure how to do. I think the main problem is that it is really hard for me to put what I am thinking down on paper and I have not the fanitest clue how to fix that.

What have I learned about my writing philosophy?
I think I learned that my writing philosophy is all wrong. Writing to me has always been just trying to say my own opion on all matters. But I guess that this is not the right way to write. By my grade it seems that the more important things about writing would be to try and incorporate others veiws into my writing which I have never been acostomed to doing. But I think getting the terrible grade that I did just shows me that some how I need to Change pretty much everything about my writing because the way I used to veiw it is not enough anymore.

What have I learned about the difference between high school writing and College writing?
Overall I have learned that there is a huge difference between high school and college writing. I learned that first off most of the essays we write are going to be very boring which always lead to us writing boring terrible essays. I also learned that the level of writing that we used in high school is not enough at all. Somehow almost all of us are going to have and try to improve are selves someway. Hopefully somehow though Craig teaching us we will learned how to step up the level. The last major thing that I think I learned is that now that we are in College we can not slack off at all. We have to dedicate every second we have to our work if we ever expect to earn a higher grade.

What changes will I make for my next essay?
I think that there will be many changes for my next essay. I know that I will have to work a lot harder and dedicate more time to my writing. I also know that I will need to try and improve useing the They say/I say format cause I suck at it right now. I also need to work at organization appantly which I have no idea how to improve at all. And last I need to improve my own opion which I thought I did a good job on but appantly is not even a key factor in our grade.


Overall This sucks. Cause I thought I deserved a much better grade then I got.

Friday, October 19, 2007

Bacon's Rebellion FINAL (edited version)

Picture a world that is so corrupt, that one group of people control the world economy. In this type of world the majority of people would be poor and unable to live successful lives. This type of government not only existed in the past, but remains present in some countries today. It is my belief, that this is the world’s future unless the human race works to change their ways and becomes less selfish. Economics was a major driving force behind Bacon's Rebellion which shaped the world as we know it today.

From the beginning of the Jamestown colony its main purposes were to develop as a well functioning colony with a strong economy. From the inception of life in this new land it was seen as a means to get rich quick. There were vast acres of fertile land ripe for farming unlike the environment in England where every piece of land was already owned. Initially the settlers were unsuccessful at farming and many of the early citizens died of starvation. Eventually they discovered a profitable crop know as tobacco. Once found it they began to grow massive amounts which in turn made the Jamestown economy flourish. Soon there was a huge separation between the rich tobacco plantation owner and the poorer farmers.

During this time of new settlements starting their own farms many economic problems started to occur. "These problems included declining tobacco prices, weather problems; including hailstorms, floods, dry spells, and hurricanes, growing commercial competition from Maryland and the Carolinas, an increasingly restricted English market, and the rising prices from English manufactured goods caused problems for the Virginians”
(http://www.nps.gov/archive/colo/Jthanout/BacRebel.html,) as this source states these problems continued plaguing the colonist’s economy blow after blow. These facts demonstrate how there are so many factors that can cause the economy to fail. I believe that this was a major contributing problem that influenced the start of Bacon’s rebellion. These problems affected the large tobacco farmers dramatically, but poorer farmers like Bacon were the ones who really suffered the most economically. If the economy at that time was prosperous then I believe Bacon’s group would never have had a problem with the order of things. With this huge inequality Bacon and his men were forced to find ways to not only improve their own plight but to improve the whole colonies economy as well.

With the economy diminishing Bacon and his followers thought it was time to act and soon the rebellion began. It started with Bacon’s people trying to find a way to blame someone else for their misfortunes. The unlucky people they chose were the Indians. Instead of them trying to work harder on their own land they started to think that everything would be easier if they could take more land. So Bacon’s people started at first by just spreading over past the land that was theirs and into the Indians land. This caused the Governor at that time to intervene. Soon the colonist were fighting between following the land treaties and trying to just make everyone’s lives more profitable. It ended in Bacon’s people getting defeated. Our history book says “The ruling elite concluded that it was safer for the colonists to fight Indians rather than each other, and the government made little effort to restrict encroachment on Indian lands. (The American Promise page 93). I believe that the book did not go into how significant this decision truly was. It did not talk about how this decision came to be or what the aftermaths of making it would be. My opinion is that this decision was one of the most important ones in shaping the future of the Chesapeake society.

This Decision to break Indian treaties and do what was best for the colonies own needs, caused economy to improve not only in the Chesapeake area but all over east coast. As
Joshua Cleveland says “Bacon’s Rebellion was a turning point in Virginia and in colonial history.” (http://www.wm.edu/niahd/journals/index.php?browse=entry&id=4124). As Cleveland states here this whole rebellion had much more effect on the world then just in Jamestown. It actually started to change the way in which colonists would take and use their land. This is because once the Englishmen started to break Indian land treaties they started to have even more land for which they could grow crops. In the end the new land they acquired made the economy only improve dramatically. Soon after the rebellion land started to be farmed more without any borders in the way. This caused Virginia and other east coast colonies to be one of the largest assets to England economy. This is one of those parts of history that people say was not morally right. But they simply need to understand that almost all of the actions of these early colonists were for economic profit and without a good economy the world is nothing. In my opinion I think that our world always has been based around creating this good economy and without one everything just crumbles to dust. So I think that even though the colonists broke their land treaties and killed many Indians, if the economy improved then it was all worth it

This style of do anything for the good of the economy is still present all over the world today. One example is how people in third world countries are getting paid slave wages making goods that the world depends on. While these people are getting treated terribly we must ask ourselves what we would do without these goods. The truth is that right now the way the world runs is based primary on who ever has the most money has the most power. This is the main problem with not only America but the whole entire world. The truth is that economy as it is now is based around making one group of people incredibly rich and the rest very poor. So we must accept that this is how the world works and there is no way it will change anytime soon so I say forget your morals and just do whatever is in your best economic interest. Now that you understand this we can go back and compare today’s world with Bacon’s rebellion. If you do this then you will obviously see that both in the past and still today the world is based off of one simple thing, that thing is economic profit. With out it there is no world that could exist.

Without economy there is no world. This is a statement that I have spent many hours contemplating over and over again. In the end I believe that I came to the conclusion that the world as we know it is doomed. I came to this conclusion by realizing that without money right now there is no way to live a successful life. With this being the way things are more then half of the population of the world is suffering. My hope is that some day the human race will evolve past their greedy ways, and then maybe we will finally have a world that I would be proud to live in. Bacon’s Rebellion was just one of these examples of economy causing people to turn into greedy monsters. Hopefully people will someday be able to learn from these past events and then start to try and change the world to a state of peace.

Tuesday, October 16, 2007

Bacon's Rebellion/Economics DRAFT

Picture a world that is so corrupt, that only one group of people controls all money. This causes the rest of the people to be left poor and not able to live any sort of successful life. This type of government not only was present in the past, but is still present in some countries today. It is my belief, that this is the future of the whole world unless the human race tries to change our ways to be less selfish. Economics was one of the major driving forces that resulted in Bacon's Rebellion and also started to then shape the rest of the world as well.

Since the beginning of Jamestown one of its main purposes was to develop a well functioning colony with a good economy. Since people first started to come over to this new land they viewed it as a way to get rich quick. There was just so much open land ready to be farmed unlike the environment in England where every piece of land was already taken. They started out without having the ability to grow any crops at all and many of the early citizens died because of starvation. Soon down the road however they discovered the wonderful crop know as tobacco. Soon after they found it they started to grow mass amounts of it which in turn made the Jamestown economy flourish. Suddenly there was a huge separation between the rich tobacco plantation owner and the less wealthy farmers.

During this time of new settles starting up their own farms many economic problems started to occur. "These problems included declining tobacco prices, weather problems including hailstorms, floods, dry spells, and hurricanes, growing commercial competition from Maryland and the Carolinas, an increasingly restricted English market, and the rising prices from English manufactured goods caused problems for the Virginians”
(http://www.nps.gov/archive/colo/Jthanout/BacRebel.html). I believe that this was the true reason that Bacon’s rebellion started. These problems did effect the large tobacco farmers a lot, but the poorer farmers like Bacon were the ones who really lost most of there money. If around that time the economy was actually prosperous then I’m sure Bacon’s group never really would have had a problem with the way things were at all. So with this going on Bacon and his men were trying to find any way possible to try and make not only their own lives more profitable but to try and improve the whole colonies economy as well.

With the economy diminishing Bacon and his followers thought it was time to act and soon their whole rebellion started. It started with Bacon’s people trying to find some way to blame someone else for their misfortunes. The unlucky people they chose were the Indians. Instead of them trying to just work harder on their own land they started to just think that everything would be easier if they could just take more land. So Bacon’s people started at first by just spreading over past the land that was theirs and into the Indians land. This caused the Governor at that time to intervene. Soon the colonist were fighting between following the land treaties and trying to just make everyone’s lives more profitable. It ended in Bacon’s people getting defeated, but soon after Governor Berkeley decided that he did not want the colonists fighting each other any more so they started to break a lot of their treaties with the Indians if it meant all of the colonists were happy. ( in a reading somewhere that I need to find later.)

This Decision to break Indian treaties and do what was best for the colonies own needs, caused economy to improve not on in the Chesapeake area but all over east coast. Once the Englishmen started to break Indian land treaties they started to have even more land for which they could grow crops. This caused many fights between Indians and the Colonists which did result in many deaths and decreased the economy for a little while, but in the end the new land they acquired made the economy only better and better. Soon this new land that will one day be called America started to be one of the largest assets to the England economy. People may say that taken the natives land was not morally right. But at the same time what would the economy be today if we didn’t.? In my opinion I think that our world always has been based around creating a good economy and without one everything just crumbles to dust. So I think that so what if we broke our agreement and killed many Indians, if the economy improved then it was all worth it. I am sure people are reading this right now and disagree with this statement but you are wrong and I am right.

This style of do anything for the good of the economy is still present all over the world today. One example is how people in third world countries are getting paid slave wages making goods that the world depends on. While these people are getting treated terribly we must ask ourselves what we would do without these goods. The truth is that right now the way the world runs is based primary on who ever has the most money has the most power. This is the main problem with not only America but the whole entire world. The truth is that economy as it is now is based around making one group of people rich as hell and the other group of people living in the dirt. So we must accept that this is how the world works and there is no way it will change anytime soon so I say forget your morals and just do whatever is in your best economic interest. So now that you understand this we can go back and compare today’s world with Bacon’s rebellion. If you do this then you will obviously see that both in the past and still today the world is based off of one simple thing, that thing is economic profit. With out it there is no world that could exist.